2010/04/22

original:
There has been some increase in the use of credit card for shopping. Therefore, I decided to apply for an additional card for my wife. I asked the bank of my credit card to send me an application form on 7th, April. Since then, I haven't received any response about it and worried if the form containing some of my secret information was lost and picked up by someone who has intent of doing something bad.

corrected by SC:
There has been some increase in the use of credit cards for shopping. Therefore, I decided to apply for an additional card for my wife. I asked the Credit Card Company to send me an application form on April 7th. Since then, I haven't received any response about it and I am worried if the form containing some confidential information was lost and picked up by someone who has intent of doing something bad.

That is very unfortunate. I hope everything works out for the best. Your sentence structure is very good. I changed bank of my credit card to Credit Card Company because it is easier to say. Dates should be written April 7th or the 7th of April. I don’t recommend using secret information. Personal information are called confidential.

檢討：

一、
信用卡發卡機構是：Credit Card Company，不是 credit card bank。

二、
在某月某日是：on April 7th或on the 7th of April，不是on 7th, April。

三、
worried的用法是 I am worried，不是I worried。

四、
個人穩私是用confidential information或personal information，不是secret information。