2010年4月16日 星期五

2010/04/16

original:
I met a ex-colleague on Facebook and it was a big surprise to me. She was a operation assistant in Taiwan office and I was a project engineer in China factory in 2005. We were both newcomers having few friends in firm, therefore we could only unbosom ourself to each other. After one year or so, she had a new plan about her career and decided to leave. From then on, I had no news from her. Thanks to Facebook, I get in touch with her and know how she is going.

corrected by SC:
I met a former colleague on Facebook and it was a big surprise to me. She was an operation assistant in the Taiwan office and I was a project engineer in the China factory in 2005. We were both new hires having very few friends in the firm; therefore we could only confide with each other. After one year or so, she had a new plan about her career and decided to leave. From then on, I had no news from her. Thanks to Facebook, I got in touch with her and now I know how she is doing.

I would recommend using former instead of ex. Former is usually for a previous position. Example would be former president. New employees at a company are usually called new hires. You can say more with fewer words. If one word can be used instead of three, go for it. Going is used for things, not people. “How are things going?” For people we say doing, “how are you doing?”.

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