2010/04/12

original:
I was told that my cell phone has beeped every 5 minutes all night almost every day and caused some people annoyed. It was the first time I learn the feeling from others about the "noise" and I was very sorry for the inconvenience that my cell phone cuased. Now, I disable the alarm function that reminds me having unread messages or missing calls on my phone to avoid making others upset.

corrected by Emily:
I was told that my cell phone had been beeping every 5 minutes, all night, almost every day and had caused some people to become annoyed. It was the first time I received a complaint from others about "noise" and I was very sorry for the inconvenience that my cell phone caused. Now, I have disabled the alarm function that reminds me I have unread messages or missed calls on my phone, to avoid making others upset.

There were a few problems with your use of tenses. Make sure that you think about when the action started and when it stopped. For example, in the first sentence you use the present perfect simple, “has beeped”, which is used to discuss events that have just been completed at the moment of speaking or to discuss events that have been happening over a period of time, but aren't finished yet. I changed it to the past perfect continuous, “had been beeping”, which is used to talk about longer events that happened for a period of time in the past, but are no longer happening now.

The sentence, “I learn the feeling from others…” was confusing to me as the meaning is a little unclear. When you use the definite article “the” you are referring to something specific, but I don’t know what feeling you are talking about.